Hello, Cat Couture:
I think that many writing teachers tell us that it is a waste of words to say "This essay is about the history of ice cream."
It is better, they say, to "get to the point": This essay discusses the history of ice cream. Or maybe even better:
Dear Readers: Ice cream has a fascinating history. (In other words, don't tell us what you are going to discuss. Just start discussing it.)
Also, perhaps some writing teachers would object to the unnecessary words "sharing with you." Just come to the point:
Continuing my mission to explain the history of ice cream, I shall now trace the development of the three largest ice cream manufacturers in the United States. (Or even better: Forget "Continuing ... ice cream." Or even better: The three largest American ice cream manufacturers have a fascinating history.)
I understand and respect the fact that in many languages, it is the custom to use such phrases as "dear reader" and "share with you."
But I think that in 2012, American writing teachers want us to write concisely. That is, just say what you want to say. Don't waste
words on telling us what you plan to say.
Here are two (very bad) examples of mine:
"I intend in this article to tell you about my trip to Mexico last year." (15 words)
Why not just say: "I visited Mexico last year." (5 words)
HAVE A NICE DAY!
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