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    Default Can you have a read and tell me if the paragraphs make sense, and answer the question

    Would love a bit of feedback on this. I have proofread it.

    How are composers successful in manipulating their audiences.

    Composers are successful in the manipulation of their audiences to place them in a position that helps convey their story and its messages. Two composers that are particularly effective at this are writer George Orwell and poet Robert Gray. Gray uses a combination of tone and similes to relate to the reader therefore easing his task of positioning the reader to experience what he is seeing when he writes. For the same reasons that Gray uses the aforementioned techniques, George Orwell manipulates his audiences through the use of foreshadowing and Satirization.

    Poet Robert Gray is effective in the manipulation of his audience, one way he achieves this is through his use of tone throughout his poetry. His descriptive language of objects is the main way he develops tone. In his poem north coast town he talks about the ‘floury apple’ and how the ‘Palm fronds crape dryly.’ these words push across a dreary feeling. The dreary feeling is expressed to show us that this Calafornication of these towns is not something that locals want. A further example of Grays use of language to develop tone is all throughout flames and dangling wire. Gray develops a depressing tone to the poem by filling it with pessimistic words, the entire poem is littered with words like ‘grey, dead, smoke swamp and eternity.’
    This is backed up by his use of structure and punctuation. Not one line in the poem ‘North Coast Town’ is exciting. The sentences almost feel cut short. “A car slows and I chase it. ‘Two hoods going shooting.’ Through developing tone, Robert Gray is able to manipulate the reader’s feel of the poem. In NCT he is effective in manipulating the readers mood to feel detached from the town, therefore allowing the reader to understand his descriptions of the town turning to California. In flames and dangling wire, Gray is conveying his fear of the world becoming a place like the rubbish dumb he is viewing so through his filling of the poem with pessimistic words he is establishing an almost evil tone, which helps in his description of this hell like place. The use and establishment of tone in Grays poem is an effective tool to manipulate the audience.

    Grays poetry urges us to look at what we have got and how it should be recognized, one way that gray is able to position his audience to do this is through his use of similes to relate his texts. He compares objects he is describing to objects that his audience are able to connect with. Helping to form an image in their mind. By constructing images that the audience is able to relate with, Gray is manipulating them to view the poem on a more personal level, furthering their relation. In his poem ‘Late Ferry’ gray compares the Ferry wading into the harbor, to ‘A moth, wondering through a projectors beam.’ This simile is effective in building an image of the ferry floating across the lights of the city. Through Gray relating the ferry in the harbor to the moth floating through a projector beam, he is using the simile to juxtapose the ferry and the harbor, making it seem fragile and small against its surroundings. The simile is also effective in showing that the harbor is a dark foreign area. And that the projector beam is guiding the ferry on its journey out of the foreign darkness and to its ‘Natural’ habitat, the City.
    ‘After the tides long gear shifting gesture’ is another extract of Grays poetry which shows how he uses similes comparing his subjects to relatable tasks and activities. The use of such a comparison manipulates the audience, again to bring a further relation to the text. This simile creates the image of the tide being thrown slowly and carefully up the shore, like the way a truck driver has to make the long throw from gear to gear. The simile also urges us to take time out to look at nature, and the way it slowly progresses and moves.
    Both of these quotes show how gray uses similes relating to everyday tasks to enhance the readers understanding of the poem.

    Writer George Orwell is another composer that effectively manipulates his audience. His book ‘Animal Farm’ is an excellent example of his use of manipulation. Orwell uses foreshadowing right from the first chapters of the book and again throughout the book. In chapter II, after the rebellion has taken place, the animals are discussing what should happen with the fresh milk, Napoleon cries out ‘Never mind the milk … The harvest is more important … Follow comrade Napoleon, I shall come down in just a minute.’ It is later noticed when they come back that the milk was nowhere to be seen.
    The sense of the farm failing is also implied by the donkey Old Benjamin and his cryptic replies to questions asked about the future of animal farm, he simply replies ‘Donkeys live a very long time.’ This expresses his doubt for the success of the farm.
    Both of these events foreshadow the events to later take place in the book and they also help to make the reader perceive the pigs as power hungry egomaniacs. This contributes to the overall underlying theme of the book, which is a criticism of the diplomatic state of communist Russia.

    ‘Animal Farm’ itself is a satirical criticism of the Russian dictatorship that was in power at the time of writing. The majority of major events in the book are a satirical criticism of the communist state. The foreshadowing mentioned previously, an example of how power can corrupt. One of the most important events in the book in terms of satire is the satirization of the animals maxims. Its shows how with just a slight bending of the truth rules can be totally inverted to mean completely different things. It’s satirical in the fact that it shows that those who are influential (Dictators), can control the ‘truth.’ The 7 laws that are painted on the wall are slowly changed to benefit those who are in power and put those who are not at a disadvantage. The law “all animals are equal” is later changed to “all animals are equal.. some are just more equal then others’” this slight change totally reverses the law to put the pigs who are self professed leaders in a higher position to the other animals. This is also an example of dramatic irony as we see what is happening, and although the animals also realize they are quickly told what the original writing ‘Truly’ said. A further criticism of the dictatorship.
    Orwell uses Personification of the animals as another satirical tool, as the book is an indirect critique of the Russian government as his work would not be published if he were to directly say he did not agree with the way the country was being run. Every character and animal in the book represents a personality or part of the dictatorship. One of the most easily identifiable examples of this is Squealer and his representation of the Russian Propaganda. Squealers way with words and his loyalty to ‘Comrade Napolean’ makes him the perfect propaganda machine. In terms of allegory Napoleon and Snowball are representations of Stalin and Trotsky, Squealers representation is not as obvious. He represents The entire propaganda machine by his twisting of the truth and his way with shutting down all other conversations by guilt tripping the animals with words like ‘Freedom’ and ‘Greater good.’ In chapter 9 when boxer is sent to the slaughterhouse, the animals quickly realize he is not going to the vet as where told but the knacker. But Squealer quickly manages to convince them that the vets cart which reads ‘Horse Knacker’ is actually owned by the vet but he hasn’t painted over it. This event is Orwell saying that regardless how much you contribute or are faithful to your leader they are rarely thankful. If not for squealer, Napoleon would have struggled to maintain power or even to come to power in the beginning. And this stands true for the satirization of the government itself as without propaganda, whether true or false, or even bent truth, Many dictatorships would not ever have risen to power or retained power over opposition leaderships.
    The Satire of Animal Farm still stands true till today and still manipulates the audience to look at the world around them and how even countries such as America which is capitalist can fall under the same satire as the Russian Revolution.

    Both composers show how effective they are at manipulating their audience, whether it be to encourage them to step back and take a look at nature for its beauty, or weather they are manipulating for a much deeper cause, like Orwell’s animal farm which forces us indirectly to look at the world we live in. Both successfully help to position the reader.
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    Just a bump. have fixed spelling errors and finished completely. edited original post to have finished doc. :)

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    Default Re: Can you have a read and tell me if the paragraphs make sense, and answer the ques

    Quote Originally Posted by Iamtheworstatenglish View Post
    Just a bump. have fixed spelling errors and finished completely. edited original post to have finished doc. :)
    I wouldn't call those writers 'composers' - in fact I've never heard of authors being referred to as this. Are you sure you've answered the right question?

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