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A. In order to solve the technical problem, people who (1) know the manual, (2) are multi-lingual, (3) have extensive knowledge of the technology, and (4) have the necessary trouble-shooting skills are needed.
B. In order to solve the technical problem, people who (1) know the manual and (2) are multi-lingual and (3) have extensive knowledge of the technology and (4) have the necessary trouble-shooting skills are needed.
Q: Both of the two sentences are correct grammar and punctuation wise?
Thanks in advance.
In sentence A, it's fine except (in my opinion) you don't need a comma between "technology" and "and (4)".
I would also start with "In order to solve the technical problem, we need people who ..." as I feel that the "are needed" at the very end of the sentence is in danger of being consumed by the rest of necessity 4.
My version would be:
In order to solve the technical problem(s), we need people who (1) know the manual, (2) are multi-lingual, (3) have extensive knowledge of the technology and (4) have the necessary troubleshooting skills.
I agree with everything said, and would add that I'd delete "In order" and start right off with "To solve..."
If you want to omit the personal "we need" (although I like people and would have done it that way myself), you can say "Solving the technical problem(s) will require people who:..."
Bravo on the parallelism: Know, are, have, have -- all verbs. So many people don't do parallelism well.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.
Thanks everybody. I have two follow-up questions if you don't mind.
1. So while A is clearly the better choice, B is not necessarily wrong grammar/punctuation wise?
(I will definitely read and learn from what you wrote about the better options that you mentioned, but I am a little more concerned about whether what I have submitted is correct at this point.)
2. By the logic of the usage of parallelism, is the following sentence also correct?
Ex. Peter knows a lot about bicycles, is multi-lingual, and writes for his school paper.
Thanks in advance.
Last edited by vcolts; 22-Mar-2012 at 12:21.