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    Default Ielts essay, writing task 2. Please give your opinion, corrections, suggestions.

    TOPIC: Some believe that an easier hobby is more beneficial than a difficult hobby. Discuss.


    In our busy world the daily routine has become more stressful and demanding. People have to follow tight schedules and work for long hours. This thing does not leave us a lot of spare time for ourselves. Yet, we find time to do a hobby and relax while doing it. Some hobbies are easy and others are not depends on your personal taste in them. In this essay we will examine both kinds of hobbies and do a comparison between them.

    The definition of an easy hobby is an activity that not necessarily takes a lot of time but still remains interesting and worth doing. Take painting, for instance, it is a wonderful hobby that can take only a few minutes but catch on paper the most significant moments of our lives. It is easy to do and contributes to the development of our fantasy and sense of beauty.

    Contrary to this, choosing a complex hobby can not only waste valuable time but also harm us in a way. For example, when people choose extreme sports as a hobby it can be dangerous and expensive, affecting both health and financial aspects. This type of activities could be satisfying and serve group or individual interests but not always they are beneficial to us.

    For summing up, it can be seen that although we have difficult and busy daily lives we always find spare time to feed our inner substances and relax by doing hobbies. Some of them might be difficult while others are easy and do not take a lot of time. Personally I prefer choosing an easy activity that is enjoyable and safe. You do not have to go slide of a mountain to get your emotions running you can sit at home with a puzzle and still have fun doing it.

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    Default Re: Ielts essay, writing task 2. Please give your opinion, corrections, suggestions.

    [QUOTE=SparkySpot;869888]TOPIC: Some believe that an easier hobby is more beneficial than a difficult hobby. Discuss.


    TOPIC: Some believe that an easier hobby is more beneficial than a difficult hobby. Discuss.


    In our busy world the daily routine has become more stressful and demanding. People have to follow tight schedules and work for long hours. This situation does not leave us a lot of spare time for ourselves. Yet, we find time to do a hobby and relax while doing it. Some hobbies are easy and others are not, depending on your personal taste in them. In this essay we will examine both kinds of hobbies and do a comparison between them.

    The definition of an easy hobby is an activity that not necessarily takes a lot of time but still remains interesting and worth doing. Take painting, for instance, it is a wonderful hobby that can take only a few minutes but catch on paper the most significant moments of our lives. It is easy to do and contribute to the development of our fantasy and sense of beauty.

    Contrary to this, choosing a complex hobby cannot only waste valuable time but also harm us in a way. For example, when people choose extreme sports as a hobby it can be dangerous and expensive, affecting both health and financial aspects. This type of activities could be satisfying and serve group or individual interests but not always they are they beneficial to us.

    In summing up it can be said that although we have difficult and busy daily lives we always find spare time to feed our inner substances and relax by doing hobbies. Some of them might be difficult while others are easy and do not take a lot of time. Personally I prefer choosing an easy activity that is enjoyable and safe. You do not have to go slide down a rock mountain to get a feeling of excitement or pleasure; you can sit at home with a puzzle and still have fun doing it.

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    Default Re: Ielts essay, writing task 2. Please give your opinion, corrections, suggestions.

    Thank you for your reply, your small correction does make this essay look better. i hope I will have time to write a good essay on my upcoming ielts. (April).. Good luck to everyone who is doing this "cruel" test.

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