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    Affair

    "Some days ago Kathy discovered that her husband had been having gay affair with another man. After some times of dissuading but without good results, Kathy pushed her husband down from the fifth floor"


    + Are these sentences natural-sounding?


    Thank you so much


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    Re: Affair

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    Hello, Namloan:

    (1) I know that you want an honest opinion, so I most respectfully and gently suggest that your two sentences do not sound too

    natural -- in my opinion, that is. In other words, if a native speaker were to read those two lines, s/he would immediately realize that

    a non-native speaker had written them.

    (2) I am no writer (!), but I suggest something like:

    A few days ago, Kathy discovered that her husband had been having a gay affair. Failing to persuade her husband to end the

    relationship, she pushed him down the stairs on the fifth floor.

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    Re: Affair

    "stairs on the fifth floor" sounds odd to me, as stairs are not on floors, but rather between them. I would opt for

    "down the fifth floor stairs"

    I know, it still doesn't sound like the stairs are between the floors. I think it's a personal thing here

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    Re: Affair

    I like Bob's 'down the fifth floor stairs.'

    Also 'She pushed him down the stairs from the fifth floor.'

    Actually, that's not as far as it sounds. His falling body would stop at the fourth floor landing.

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    Re: Affair

    [QUOTE'She pushed him down the stairs from the fifth floor.'

    [/QUOTE]



    EXCELLENT advice from an excellent teacher.

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    Re: Affair

    Quote Originally Posted by namloan View Post
    "SomeA few days ago Kathy discovered that her husband had been having gay affair with another man. After some times of dissuading but without good results failing to convince him to end the affair, Kathy pushed her husband him down the stairs from the fifth floor"


    Are these sentences natural-sounding?

    Thank you so much.

    namloan
    Please see my suggested version above. You don't need to say "a gay affair with another man". For a start, you've said "her husband" so we know he is a man. If you're a man "A gay affair" could only be with a man. You don't need to say "another man" anyway - that sounds like Kathy is a man! You could use:

    She discovered her husband was having a gay affair.
    She discovered her husband was having an affair with a man.

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