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    Question Problems with percentages

    This sentence sounds so weird but I can't find a way to improve it. I'd like to avoid using "With+percentage"

    "...is constituted by Middle East with 56.52 % and Canada with 14.48 % while Central and South America (8.12 %), Eastern Europe (6.58 %), Africa (6.38 %) and Asia (2.89 %)"

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    Default Re: Problems with percentages

    To make useful suggestions, we need the whole sentence.

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    Thank you 5jj.

    "Globally, over 70 % of the oil resources are concentrated in two different areas constituted by Middle East with 56.52 % and Canada with 14.48 % while a further 25% of global oil reserves is represented by Central and South America (8.12 %), Eastern Europe (6.58 %), Africa (6.38 %) and Asia (2.89 %)"

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    Quote Originally Posted by ARUK2008 View Post
    Thank you 5jj.

    "Globally, over 70 % of the oil resources are concentrated in two different areas constituted by Middle East with 56.52 % and Canada with 14.48 % while a further 25% of global oil reserves is represented by Central and South America (8.12 %), Eastern Europe (6.58 %), Africa (6.38 %) and Asia (2.89 %)"
    I think we already know that the Middle East and Canada are 2 different areas.

    You could say "... are concentrated in the Middle East (56.52%) and Canada (14.48%)..."

    Better yet, this seems to be a good use for a table of data. Make the point about 70% being in the ME and Canada, and put all of the other numbers into a separate table.

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    Default Re: Problems with percentages

    Thank you Dave but that's not the problem in here. This belong to an IELTS task 1 report and I need help rewording: "represented by Central and South America (8.12 %), Eastern Europe (6.58 %), Africa (6.38 %) and Asia (2.89 %)" without using South America with 8.12%, Eastern Europe with 6.58%, Africa with 6.38%...too many WITH WITH WITH...everywhere!

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    I don't think there is a better way. I would use parentheses before I would use a series of "withs."

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    Globally, over 70 % of the world's oil resources are concentrated in two main areas, the Middle East with 56.52 % and Canada with 14.48 %; of a further 25% of global oil reserves 8.12% comes from Central and South America, 6.58% from Eastern Europe, 6.38% from Africa, and 2.89% from Asia.

    How does that sound?

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    Yes! Wow! It sounds so much better! Thank you Ajj!

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    Um... the Middle East is in Asia. So whe you later say "Asia" do you mean central and eastern Asia, or something else?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Um... the Middle East is in Asia.
    Only technically.

    I think most Americans think of "Asia" only as the Far East. It always strikes me as odd to hear a British person describe someone from India, for example, as "Asian."

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