II am a beginner. I
wortewrote some simple sentences Butbut I think there are many errors in it. Please correct my writing.
You wouldWould you please edit it the way you think it should be? Thanks!
In the article I have added: In the past few winters…. because you used simple past. But if it is always so dangerous in winter, you can use simple present, and my addition is not necessary any more. For example: The roads are covered with hard and thick ice.
The place where I live is very dangerous in winter because of
frozen disaster.icy roads.
In the past few winters, for example, the roads were covered with hard and thick ice causing total chaos on the roads. Tens of thousands of vehicles
werestranded on the main road, unable to move forward or return home (Or:…or backward) There were 10 kilometerstailbacks of 10 kilometers on the road. Trucks could not transport coal for power plants. Power transmission towers and power lines collapsed by tons of (Or: a thick sheet of) ice. TtIt was too heavy to them, thus causing power cuts. The consequences were such that communication went down; trucks couldn't transport food and medication reachedto the city;
coulddid not work, and people couldn't drink water. Even madeIn addition, the streets were even too slippery to walk on, so that people could not go to work, and on top of that many people fell down and broke their arms and legs on the street.
februar, German speaking
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