mtxw78
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- Joined
- Apr 26, 2012
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- China
- Current Location
- UK
I am a beginner. I worte some simple sentences But I think there are many errors in it. Please correct my writing.
You would edit it the way you think it should be. Thanks!
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The place where I live is very dangerous in winter because of frozen disaster.
Roads were covered with hard, thick ice. Tens of thousands vehicles were stranded on the road. Unable to move forward or return home. There was 10 kilometers tailback on the road. Trucks could not transport coal for power plants. Power transmission towers and power lines was collapsed by tons of ice. Tt was too heavy to them. Causing power cuts. Communication went down. Trucks couldn't transport food and medication reached the city.
Waterworks could not work. People couldn't drink water. Even made the streets too slippery to walk on.
People could not went to work. Many people fell down and broke arms and legs on the street.
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You would edit it the way you think it should be. Thanks!
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BEGIN:
The place where I live is very dangerous in winter because of frozen disaster.
Roads were covered with hard, thick ice. Tens of thousands vehicles were stranded on the road. Unable to move forward or return home. There was 10 kilometers tailback on the road. Trucks could not transport coal for power plants. Power transmission towers and power lines was collapsed by tons of ice. Tt was too heavy to them. Causing power cuts. Communication went down. Trucks couldn't transport food and medication reached the city.
Waterworks could not work. People couldn't drink water. Even made the streets too slippery to walk on.
People could not went to work. Many people fell down and broke arms and legs on the street.
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