One twisted sentence

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Flubber

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Hi there!

I have problems with one specific, very complex sentence...


That’s all. You know the truth
about a child, whose life has been shattered, and who has shattered them to
others, chasing something, she neither could’ve cought nor should’ve.



That sound really strange. I would be extremely grateful if someone kind helped me with it.

Thanks in advance,
Flubber
 

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Hi there!

I have problems with one specific, very complex sentence...


That’s all. You know the truth
about a child, whose life has been shattered, and who has shattered them to
others, chasing something, she neither could’ve cought nor should’ve.



That sound really strange. I would be extremely grateful if someone kind helped me with it.

Thanks in advance,
Flubber

You're right, it's very strange. Was it written by a native speaker? The part with "and who has shattered them to others" doesn't make sense, and "cought" is an incorrect spelling.
 
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No, it was written by me, actually :] I'm Polish, currently translating a bit long text. I came across that complicated sentence, I couldn't handle.

As far as the meaningless part is concerned... I wanted to write:
1) Her life has been shattered,
2) She has also shattered lifes of others.

Yes, it should be caught :)

Thanks for such a fast response!
 

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In that case, say

'You know the truth about a child (delete comma) whose life has been shattered and who has shattered the lives of others. . . '

I can live with the repeated shattered if it appears in the original language.

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You're welcome and your thanks are appreciated, but a simple click on the Like button is all you need to do to acknowledge the answers we give.

Rover:cool:
 
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