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    Dear teachers and native speakers, could you be so kind to look through the essay below and correct the serious mistakes. The task of the essay is to practise vocabulary on character and appearance.

    Many thanks in advance.

    I’d like to present a famous German renaissance artist Albreht Durrer and to describe his self-portrait with thistle.
    One of his contemporaries wrote about him:
    “The Nature gifted him a slender body with outstanding proportion and noble carriage good matching his noble spirit. He had expressive (выразительное) face with glinting eyes, noble-shaped nose, rather long neck, very large chest, lean stomach, muscular thighs, strong and well-shaped shins. But you surely would have said that you haven’t seen nothing more graceful (изящный: svelte, slim) than his fingers.
    His speech was so pleasant and witted than nothing could upset the listeners but its end.”

    Till the present, his personality remains enigmatic and charming. The dismal mystic, the author of “Apocalypses” and “Passions”, he, at the same time, was an absolutely gorgeous, fashionable man, dreaming to learn how to dance and writing the treatise about the Art.
    His horoscope, made by a contemporary astrologist, describes Durrer in the following way:
    he has outstanding, exceptional gift of painting;
    he is attractive to the opposite sex, successful lover, he is followed his inclination to women, and is attracted to more than one woman at one time;
    open and frank;
    likes arms;
    willingly travels;
    he will never being poor and never become reach;
    he will be having only one wife;

    In fact, he was smart vivacious man; he had only one wife, owned a house and was fond of traveling. He didn’t have a high social status, as he was a son of noble-metal farrier. Nevertheless, his talent was acknowledged by the contemporaries, and he was very successful artist. He wasn’t reach only for he was a real spendthrift. He could be extravagant at times; he was giving away presents, distributing engravings (гравюры) and paintings as presents; he was constantly buying things useless for household.
    He realized that he was a good-looking, very attractive person; He adored his appearance and wrote plenty of self-portraits.
    Durrer painted the self-portrait with thistle being in one of his usual journey, and sent it home. The thistle in the early-German language was called as ‘(conjugal/marital/matrimonial) fidelity’.
    At first site, we pay attention to the sparkling appearance of the artist and his pretentious attire. In fact, he was fond of fashionable clothes; he was spending substantial sums of money for expensive fabrics and elegant head-dresses; he was also carefully choosing the colour, style of clothes and accessories, and was always well-dressed. He putted careful attention to gloves as he considered them as a special symbol of his extraordinary skilled hands, the hands of genius.
    If you examine his face in the portrait, you will notice that his forehead is longer and wider than the part of the face known as low zone, which consists of the area between the nose tip and the jaw line. This facial trait tells us that he had an IQ above average, that he was a fast learner, but being impractical, he would not have been able to help his wife in household-keeping. Nevertheless, he did pedantic notes in the traveling dairies about all the presents and even about change.
    In the portrait, he has straw-coloured wooly (густые, курчавые), glossy hair with short wayward fringe, elliptical, deep-set, soft grey eyes. There is the stubble (the start of a beard) on his chin. He had large ears with long lobes what also attests of the high intelligence. The expression of his broad face is calm what gives me an additional reason to think of him as of even-tempered, sensible person.
    In this portrait, he is paled-skinned, and its well-known that his native city Nuremberg was dull and cloudy; that was one of the reasons he didn’t like to come back there.

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    Hello Marie

    Here are some suggestions for the first part:

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    I’d like to present a famous artist from the German Renaissance, Albrecht Dürer, and to describe his "Self Portrait with Thistle".

    One of his contemporaries wrote about him:

    “Nature gave him a slender body, beautifully proportioned, and of a noble bearing that well matched his noble spirit. He had an expressive face, with shining eyes and an aristocratic nose; a rather long neck; a very deep chest; and a lean stomach, with muscular thighs and strong, well-shaped shins. But you would have said that you had never seen anything more delicate than his fingers.

    His speech was so pleasant and witty than nothing upset his listeners except its end.”

    Till now, his personality has remained enigmatic. The melancholy mystic of the “Apocalypses” and “Passions” was also a handsome, fashionable man, who dreamt about learning to dance and writing a treatise about it.

    His horoscope, made by a contemporary astrologist, describes Dürer in the following way:

    He has an outstanding, exceptional gift of painting; he is attractive to the opposite sex, and a successful lover; he has followed his inclination towards women, and is attracted to more than one woman at one time; he is open and frank; likes the science of arms; willingly travels; will never be poor and never become rich; will have only one wife..."

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    I have to go now; but maybe someone else will help with the remainder!

    MrP

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    Dear MrPedantic!
    Thank you very much for your help. I can't recognize my essay!

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