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    It depends on which decisions their kids made. For example, if their kids want to study abroad, of course, they have to consult with their parents. And their parents will give them advisable suggestions. What’s more, studying abroad needs a large amount of money, their parents should be part in their kids’ decision-making process. On the other hand, if their kids want to find a good place to relax. There is no need to confer with their parents.
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    Heyuting - I have a question for you. You have posted a lot of these short pieces for correction. May I ask what they are for? Are they pieces which you have handed in to a tutor and have been told contain errors but you have not been told what the errors are? Are they "homework"-related at all?

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    It's not for my homework. I am trying to improve my writing skill, because I couldn't find the errors I made, even though it seemed right for me.
    I am sorry. Did I bother you guys?
    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Heyuting - I have a question for you. You have posted a lot of these short pieces for correction. May I ask what they are for? Are they pieces which you have handed in to a tutor and have been told contain errors but you have not been told what the errors are? Are they "homework"-related at all?

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    Default Re: Can you help me correct these sentences? Thank you!

    Quote Originally Posted by heyuting View Post
    It depends on which decisions their kids made. For example, if their kids want to study abroad, of course, they have to consult with their parents. And their parents will give them advisable suggestions. What’s more, studying abroad needs a large amount of money, their parents should be part in their kids’ decision-making process. On the other hand, if their kids want to know find a good place to relax. There is no need to confer with their parents.
    Your writting is very good indeed.
    ( Do you need " know" in the sentence "if their kids want to know find a good place to relax")

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    Quote Originally Posted by khiemvv View Post
    Your writting is very good indeed.
    Welcome to the forum, khiemvv.

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    Quote Originally Posted by heyuting View Post
    It's not for my homework. I am trying to improve my writing skill, because I couldn't find the errors I made, even though it seemed right for me.
    I am sorry. Did I bother you guys?
    No, please don't apologise. You aren't bothering us! I only asked because there didn't seem to be a connection between the short paragraphs that you were posting here. Initially, I thought perhaps you were writing a short story or a short book and you wanted us to help you correct in small parts, but then I realised that the posts didn't connect. So do you simply pick a random topic and start writing about it? I'm just curious.

    Here are my suggestions for your piece:

    It depends on which decisions their kids make (I would use the present tense here as the rest of the piece is in the present tense). For example, if their kids want to study abroad, of course, (no comma) they have to consult with their parents and their parents will give them advisable suggestions useful advice. What’s more, studying abroad needs a large amount of money is expensive and their parents should be part in of their kids’ decision-making process. On the other hand, if their kids want to find a good place to relax, there is no need to confer with their parents.



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    Thank you for all the people who helped me! I appreciate it.

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