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    TheShadow is offline Member
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    Default please correct to make it sound better

    Hi,

    "The phone is currently sold out, a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon"

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    Default Re: please correct to make it sound better

    Quote Originally Posted by TheShadow View Post
    Hi,

    "The phone is currently sold out; a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon"

    Thanks

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****

    I think that in writing, your sentence is fine -- if you use the semicolon that I have added to your sentence.

    In speech, you might want to say:

    The phone is currently sold out, but a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon.

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    Default Re: please correct to make it sound better

    "Stock" sounds odd to me. "A new supply" sounds better to me. Or just "...more have been ordered..."

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