she hits- shouldn't this be past tense as you started in the past?
as a comical relief- as comic relief
low pitch and loud pitch that- that what? Unfinished
These variations of pitches build up suspense as it reaches the climax of alternation.- you're jumping from the past to the present throughout this- I'd stick to one
children songs- children's
children’ perception - children's
to these opera- this
to help convey- help convey