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    Help with punctuation

    Hi,

    I need help regarding the punctuation of this piece, it would be greatly appreciated.

    Dulcet,
    sounds of the minaret
    challenging skies,
    once threatened...

    Praying
    glorifying

    greeting the martyrs.


    From the cemeteries
    through the murk
    there it was

    stumbling
    still approaching

    "hope"
    the dead gladly given.

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    What's the meaning of the icon "Moved" ?!

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Why the comma at the end of the first line?

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    To set off introductory elements of the poem. I tend to use this manner of writing.

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Thhis is how I would punctuate it:

    Dulcet sounds of the minaret, challenging skies, once threatened...

    Praying, glorifying, greeting the martyrs.

    From the cemeteries, through the murk, there it was, stumbling, still approaching -

    "hope", the dead gladly given.


    I ran some of the lines together to make it easier to see things as a whole.

    I am afraid that I don't know what the last line means.

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Quote Originally Posted by easybreakable View Post
    To set off introductory elements of the poem. I tend to use this manner of writing.
    I see no need to put a comma there- it doesn't set off anything IMO, and just creates a barrier between an adjective and its noun- they're dulcet sounds, not dulcet, sounds.

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    Thhis is how I would punctuate it:

    Dulcet sounds of the minaret, challenging skies, once threatened...

    Praying, glorifying, greeting the martyrs.

    From the cemeteries, through the murk, there it was, stumbling, still approaching -

    "hope", the dead gladly given.


    I ran some of the lines together to make it easier to see things as a whole.

    I am afraid that I don't know what the last line means.
    I can't change the layout. It's supposed to be free verse not prose.

    The last line is related to the martyrs, they are the dead who gave the hope with a will. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    I see no need to put a comma there- it doesn't set off anything IMO, and just creates a barrier between an adjective and its noun- they're dulcet sounds, not dulcet, sounds.

    And I appreciate your opinion.Other than this, is there any remark regarding the rest of the poem?

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    Re: Help with punctuation

    Quote Originally Posted by easybreakable View Post
    I can't change the layout. It's supposed to be free verse not prose.
    I didn't say you should change the layout. I changed it to make it easier for me to punctuate. You can have whatever layout you wish.

    The last line is related to the martyrs, they are the dead who gave the hope with a will.
    That doesn't mean anything to me, either.
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    Re: Help with punctuation

    I'm sorry, seems like I was a bit confused when I read your first response. I will stick to your corrections, they're convenient.

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