Recently, I've come across this sentence:
Someone has to do this now, it is our destiny, if it is us that everyone, expects us to have the mission won.
I wonder if the underlined part is grammatically OK or not.
What do you native speakers think? Do you think it sounds fine as it is?
Without the second 'us' as:
if it is us that everyone, expects to have the mission won.
would it work?
The original has that comma, so I left it uncorrected.
Without that comma, only the second one here would work?
...if it is us that everyone expects us to have the mission won.
...if it is us that everyone expects to have the mission won.
You can get the idea, but it's a dog's dinner of a sentence.
A dog's dinner. Really!?
Here is the comment I found beside the lyrics from which the sentence was excerpted:
... here are the Yamato lyrics as re-written by Mike Vescera, which are actually a pretty faithful translation of the original.
NOT A TEACHER
As far as song lyrics are concerned, sort of everything goes and the authors of them often do not bother with correct grammar or meaningful phrases. And there is always the possibility that someone just made a typo when writing the lyrics.
Please note that I'm not a teacher.