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    Default Voice over to be improved

    Dear teachers

    I have attached an English voice over recording, and would like to seek your opinions which areas should be improved. Please kindly advise.

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    Anthony
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    Default Re: Voice over to be improved

    Quote Originally Posted by patran View Post
    Dear teachers

    I have attached an English voice over recording, and would like to seek your opinions which areas should be improved. Please kindly advise.

    Regards

    Anthony
    I tried to put down everything you said. (for my listening practice)


    Your employer has selected Invesco Hong Kong as your MPF service provider. So you're about to become a member of Invesco strategic MPF scheme. This video and ??????? of the scheme will assist you to make a decision on your investment choices. The MPF scheme is decide? to provide financial peace of mind for local workers when they retire. Full-time and part-time employees as well as self-employed persons, aged between 18 and 65, must enroll in MPF. Except under special circumstances, ????? benefits in the scheme are payable at the age of 65. You and your employer must each contribute 5% of your relevant income up to a maximum of 1000 Hong Kong dollars per month.


    I couldn't catch ??????? part.

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    Default Re: Voice over to be improved

    "Enrollment kit" and "accrued", I believe.

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    Default Re: Voice over to be improved

    Quote Originally Posted by patran View Post
    Dear teachers

    I have attached an English voice over recording, and would like to seek your opinions which areas should be improved. Please kindly advise.
    Regardless of what kind of accent you're going for, here are a couple of words that you mispronounced:

    strategic (you placed the accent on the wrong syllable, it should sound like straTEGIC)
    video (sounded like veedeo)
    make (not very well articulated)
    employer (make sure you place the accent on the right syllable, so emPLOYER)
    contribute (you placed the accent on the wrong syllable)

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    Default Re: Voice over to be improved

    Not bad. Just out of interest, may I ask you, how long have you been working on your pronunciation and how long have you been studying English?
    Please note that I'm not a teacher.

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