Re: Help with grammar and sentence structured
Welcome to the forum, wotcanisay.
As a native speaker of English, you should know that some of your sentences are simply not complete English sentences - those I have underlined, for example, and some not natural - those I have coloured red.
If you want us to help you, you need to makes some effort yourself. See what you can do with the sentences I have underlined and coloured, and then we can look at the remaining parts.
Originally Posted by wotcanisay
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