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    Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    The characteristics of the pain are similar to the properties of acute heart stroke the patient suffered before

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    The characteristics of the pain are similar to the properties of acute heart stroke the patient suffered before
    I don't think you can equate the characteristics of a particular pain to an actual medical condition. In addition, what is "acute heart stroke"? I know what "acute angina", "heart attack" and "stroke" are but I've never seen an "acute heart stroke".
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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I don't think you can equate the characteristics of a particular pain to an actual medical condition. In addition, what is "acute heart stroke"? I know what "acute angina", "heart attack" and "stroke" are but I've never seen an "acute heart stroke".

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    Let's talk about grammar only. Supposed that "acute angina" (not acute heart stroke) was in the OP's thread. How to edit it?

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    I do agree with emrs2d2 that "heart stroke" is wrong whereas "heart attack" is right....
    the latter refers to the condition when the heart stops working...!!!!

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    Please click:
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    Let's talk about grammar only. Supposed that "acute angina" (not acute heart stroke) was in the OP's thread. How to edit it?
    OK, so I don't have a medical degree!

    As I said in my original response, I don't think you can compare the characteristics of a particular pain with a separate medical condition.

    Did you mean that the pain the patient suffered this time was the same as the pain experienced when he/she suffered an acute heart stroke previously?
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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    OK, so I don't have a medical degree!

    As I said in my original response, I don't think you can compare the characteristics of a particular pain with a separate medical condition.

    Did you mean that the pain the patient suffered this time was the same as the pain experienced when he/she suffered an acute heart stroke previously?
    Yes!
    Could we make it more succinct (with less words)?

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    The pain was similar to that of her previous acute angina attack.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 19-Jun-2012 at 21:01. Reason: change of medical issue
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    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    I looked only at the first page of that link. All the articles seemed to be written by non-native speakers.

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    The pain was similar to that of her previous acute heart stroke.
    Stick with your previous feeling! 'Heart stroke' is not natural English.

    ps. NewHopeR, you have a number of threads with similar titles, none of which helps us much. "characteristics similar to properties?" would have been good for this.
    Last edited by 5jj; 19-Jun-2012 at 21:08.

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    Re: Does the sentence sound natural? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    Stick with your previous feeling! 'Heart stroke' is not natural English.
    I did notice that the link went to Google China or somewhere so I opened Google UK and searched for "acute heart stroke". I found precisely one hit on page 1 so I decided to avoid the issue (!) and deal with the "pain" question. I do stand by my assertion that "heart stroke" isn't correct English but went with it for the sake of speed.

    I've gone back and amended my post to "acute angina attack" as we all know that exists!
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