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    not so much that officials could steal a big sum

    Hello,

    I'm trying to correct a clumsy sentence and would like to know if the corrected version sounds more or less natural:

    The original:
    ...this money is enough for renovation, but not so much that officials could steal a big sum without anyone notice it.

    My try:
    ....this money is enough for renovation, but not so much to enable officials to steal a big part of it without anyone noticing it.

    But I still don't like it. I'd be grateful for your comments.

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    Re: not so much that officials could steal a big sum

    You're right, your version doesn't sound right. I think it's because "not so much that" is a standard phrase as used in the original sentence. Changing "that" to "to enable" doesn't work.

    Nothing is enabling anything. It's just a statement of fact that there is a lot of money but there is not so much money that some of it going missing wouldn't be noticed.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 20-Jun-2012 at 15:05. Reason: missing letter
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: not so much that officials could steal a big sum

    Quote Originally Posted by Verona_82 View Post
    Hello,

    I'm trying to correct a clumsy sentence and would like to know if the corrected version sounds more or less natural:

    The original:
    ...this money is enough for renovation, but not so much enough that officials could steal a big large sum without anyone noticing [STRIKE] it. [/STRIKE] .

    My try:
    ....this money is enough for renovation, but not so much enough to enable officials to steal a big large part of it without anyone noticing it. .

    But I still don't like it. I'd be grateful for your comments.
    Any better?
    Last edited by billmcd; 20-Jun-2012 at 15:08.

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    Re: not so much that officials could steal a big sum

    Thank you, billmcd and emsr2d2, for your replies. I'm glad I asked here.

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