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    Please check my paragraph

    The life has taught me if you chase perfection you can achieve excellence. I am a man of value who has never settled for anything but the best. Hence it is my resolute to buy a home that is not just an address. But a place called paradise that offers the best of amenities & glorifies the delight of my family.

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    Re: Please check my paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    The Life has taught me [that] if you chase perfection you can achieve excellence. I am a man of value with strong values who has never settled for anything but the best. Hence it is my resolute resolution to buy a home that is not just an address but a [place called] paradise that offers the best of amenities & and glorifies the delights of my family.
    I have made some corrections above, but only to actual errors. I would probably write the piece itself somewhat different but it is your piece.

    For information, "a man of value" means (to me) that you are a valuable man, ie you are worth a lot. I don't think that's what you meant. I think you meant that your values are very important to you.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: Please check my paragraph

    I exactly means what you understood, may be my style of writing is not up to the mark.

    To be precise - I am man of value, i imported this idea from quote, be not a man of success but a man of value.
    May be again I have not able to structure it correct here.

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