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    Default Please help me with errors in my english cv

    I have just finished my cv for a job. But my english is not well to do it perfectly. Please help me correct grammar:

    EDUCATION
    From 2008 to 2012. HA NOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTRY

    • Bachelor of Business Administration with a fair degree.
    • Date of Graduation: June 2012

    From 2004 to 2007. SOC SON HIGH SCHOOL

    • The Second Prize Winner of the 2007 Ha Noi examination for gifted high school students in Mathematics.

    WORK EXPERIENCE
    Match – May/2012. Bookseller

    • Used e-commerce to retail books at low price.
    • Took order from customers by phone or email.
    • Delivery in only 24 hours after confirmations.
    • Provided a quality service to customers.

    February/2012 Salesman at Tien Tho Bookstore

    • Kept bookstands clean, aligned and sufficient.
    • Introducing and finding out what customers want to get.
    • Made them feel satisfied with goods and welcome.

    September – October/2011. Waiter at Nam Son Restaurant

    • Greeted guests at restaurant, took and served orders.
    • Was required to assist co-workers in doing related duties.

    All of my part-time work experience has helped me to be more confident, independent and keep good time management. Furthermore, I had learned a lot about computer knowledge and communication.
    SKILLS
    Computer

    • Certificate in computing: B grade
    • Advanced level in MS Word, Excel, Power Point, Outlook, Windows, Internet, Email.
    • Intermediate level in MS Access, Project.

    Especially, I can type fast with ten fingers and use electronic commerce for sale and marketing.
    Languages

    • English: Fair fluency. Toeic is 620 points.
    • Vietnamese: Active fluency

    ACTIVITIES
    In school

    • Key member of Students In Free Enterprise. Learned how to organize events about Sife teams, took part in other universities activities.
    • Team leader for most of subject presentations in class. I was responsible for summarizing ideas and designing slides with power point. Our score is always more than or equal to 8 points. It also taught me the importance of listening, supporting and respecting the others. They are very useful skills when working in group.

    Living life

    • Play football in the role of a goalkeeper.
    • I like riding bikes and travelling to different places.
    • In my free time, I always read newspaper to update new knowledge, news and lastest events.

    This is the end of the text. Thank you
    Last edited by nguyentuoi30; 01-Jul-2012 at 17:10.

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    Default Re: Please help me with errors in my english cv

    You might want to do some reading on formatting resumes/CVs. We don't list things like "From year to year" but just the year of graduation, for example. We don't use full sentences and we're not conversational.

    For example: Especially, I can type fast with ten fingers and use electronic commerce for sale and marketing.

    Typing speed: 60 WPM
    Fluent in social media uses for sales and marketing (Though if this is true, you should give some supporting statements and not just say so.)


    Please take a look at some Web sites that talk about these things and redo your resume following that guidance and post again.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: Please help me with errors in my english cv

    Thank for your advice. That is so important. But how about grammar? Do you think i made some errors?

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    There is really no point in talking about grammar right now. The entire thing needs to be restructured.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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