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    teacher, can I say "she has won a scholarship?". Please check for errors. Thank you.

    Ling's mother said her daughter has won a scholarship to attend a six month Mandarin program in Shanghai. Her daughter was told by her teacher that she was picked out of over 1,000 students.

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    Quote Originally Posted by thomas615 View Post
    teacher, can I say "she has won a scholarship?". Please check for errors. Thank you.

    Ling's mother said her daughter has won a scholarship to attend a six month Mandarin program in Shanghai. Her daughter was told by her teacher that she was picked out of over 1,000 students.
    Yes, it's OK, but I would use "selected" in place of "picked".

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    Hello.
    May I ask a question here?
    Would it be better for "six month" to be hyphenated? - "six-month"

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    Yes it would be better to say a "six-month" program.

    Please don't forget that capital letters play an important role in correct sentences.
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    Not a teacher, but a fellow learner!

    I don't think this is grammatically desirable, even though they can perceive its meaning. Present perfect always refers to the present state, so past perfect fits the best as past perfect refers to the past. If you say like this, it's like going back and forth between times in a time machine.

    ex)Ling's mother said her daughter has had won a scholarship to attend a six month Mandarin program in Shanghai.

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    Quote Originally Posted by keannu View Post
    Not a teacher, but a fellow learner!

    I don't think this is grammatically desirable, even though they can perceive its meaning. Present perfect always refers to the present state, so past perfect fits the best as past perfect refers to the past. If you say like this, it's like going back and forth between times in a time machine.

    ex)Ling's mother said her daughter has had won a scholarship to attend a six month Mandarin program in Shanghai.
    Hello.
    I know what you mean, but if it (winning the scholarship) has the 'present reality', I think the Present Perfect is possible.
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    It is the preferred tense if the study under the scholarship is not completed.
    Last edited by Barb_D; 15-Jul-2012 at 18:16.
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    As a native speaker, I would not say it that way....

    Ling's mother said her daughter won a scholarship to attend a six month....

    Please do not correct my grammar. This is how a natve would say it, writing it is different. I think it is okay how you have it now. You can also replace has with had.
    Native English speaker living in Maryland =)

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    Natalie, I am a native speaker as well. And I would say it using present perfect if the scholarship was recently awarded and/or if she is still away studying under that scholarship.

    I am not correcting your grammar, because there is more than one "correct" way to say this, but please don't assert that your version is THE version that would be use.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Natalie1991 View Post
    Please do not correct my grammar.
    All of us who post here, whether to ask a question or to respond to one, must expect to have anything we write questioned. Those of us who respond should not assume that we are incapable of error.

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