how can I correct essay error?

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sclark7

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We went to chesapeake, Virginia this summer. The first place that we went was Chesapeake Bay Bridge Tunnel. While we were driving on the bridge, it look amazing outside. when we finished hangout at the bridge, we went to the beach and swam for a little while. My parent told me to go back to the shallow area when I almost slumped. At last, we went to hiking.

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We went to chesapeake, Virginia this summer. The first place that we went was Chesapeake Bay Bridge Tunnel. While we were driving on the bridge, it look amazing outside. when we finished hangout at the bridge, we went to the beach and swam for a little while. My parent told me to go back to the shallow area when I almost slumped. At last, we went to hiking.

Thank you.

I don't know if this is homework or not, but we don't just give you corrections. I have underlined each part that needs some kind of correction so you can try again. If it is homework, though, you need to submit your own work, not ours.
 

sclark7

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We went to Chesapeake, Virginia this summer. The first place that we went was Chesapeake Bay Bridge Tunnel. While we were driving on the bridge, it looked amazing outside the car. After we finished hungout at the bridge, we went to the beach and swam for a little while. My parents told me to go back to the shallow area when I was almost slumped. At last, we went to hike.

It is not the homework, I am self-learning English.

Thank you.
 
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