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    Smile Need help with text correction.

    Hi there,

    I have some text, which has been translated from French to English using online translator. I have done some minor corrections to it, but I think it still need some more improvements.

    "100% Natural Hand Made Soap. A Great Soap made from two Certified Organic Oils: First Cold Pressed Organic Olive Oil and Organic Oil of Bay Leaf (Laurel).
    This soap is a highly natural, it comes without individual packaging, therefore it is environmentally friendly.
    Aleppo Soap Excellence 5% is the mildest and the whitest of all the Aleppo soaps line.
    Its value for money is unbeatable, especially since it lasts 6 times longer than usual bar of soap.
    Aleppo traditional bars are not moulded or polished. It comes in extra large hand-cut bars weighing around 200g. You can easily cut them into smaller bars if you wish.

    Benefits:
    -deep cleansing, antiseptic;
    -leaves skin clean and fresh;
    -mild, natural olive fragrance;
    -no synthetic perfumes;
    -suitable for all skin types;
    -extremly long lasting.
    It is also recommended for people suffering for eczema, psoriasis and acne.

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    Argan Oil is designed for sensitive, mature, allergic and dry skin.
    Also used in skin diseases such as acne, psoriasis or eczema.
    Colorless oil protects the skin from drying, smoothes, soothes irritated skin inflammation, revitalises, slows the aging process, improves flexibility, relieves the symptoms of juvenile acne, allergies, sunburn.
    Its properties owe to the presence of unsaturated fatty acid and linoleic acid (omega 6). Linoleic acid-omega 6 is essential for life, an important role in maintaining the behavior in a good state of our skin (elasticity, scarring).
    Rich in wit.E. It has the properties of neutralising free radicals.
    In application to skin fights against the aging.
    Strengthens hair and nails."

    Thanks in advance for any help.

    Regards,
    jimny

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    Re: Need help with text correction.

    Have you looked at the descriptions of similar products on English websites? They should give you some ideas about how these companies use the language to describe their own products.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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