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    Emphasize my contribution to the company

    Hello,
    I want to emphasize my contribution to the company in my resume. Basically I particated the programming for a company and because of it the software go to production. The company successfully went to market. The original statements sre:
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    Worked with VB6/VB.NET and MS SQL Server to develop Point of Sale product for aaa stores. aaa stores operate as a division of Burnaby-based bbb Canada Ltd., a wholly-owned subsidiary of bbb Co., Inc. (NYSE:ccc);
    How to correct it?

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    The most important thing you did was develop a point-of-sale product, not what code you used, and I"m not sure that the fact that it's a wholly owned subidiary is impoartant at all.

    Developed a Point-of-Sale product for AAA, meeting strict deadline requirements to allow this new division of BBB to go to market, using VB6/VB.NET and MS SQL
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    The most important thing you did was develop a point-of-sale product, not what code you used, and I"m not sure that the fact that it's a wholly owned subsidiary is important at all.
    Sorry if I am wrong.
    I am confused with "develop" usage in this sentence.
    Is it a mistake?
    I think it must be "development" or "was to".
    Please correct me if I am wrong?
    Thanks!
    Last edited by anhnha; 31-Jul-2012 at 16:52.

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    You can say "was develop" or "was to develop" or "was the development of" -- but the last form is wordier than necessary.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    'Please correct me if I am wrong?'

    That is a request and doesn't need a question mark.

    Rover

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    You can say "was develop" or "was to develop" or "was the development of" -- but the last form is wordier than necessary.
    Thanks for help!
    But I am still confused with "was develop". I always think that after "to be" we have to use a adjective or a noun.
    Could you help me clarify it?

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    Barb said

    'The most important thing you did was develop a point-of-sale product',

    which is fine.

    Rover

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    Re: Emphasize my contribution to the company

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    Barb said

    'The most important thing you did was develop a point-of-sale product',

    which is fine.

    Rover
    And as Barb explained shortly afterwards, that could be worded "The most important thing you did was to develop a point-of-sale product".

    The rule that "to be must be followed by an adjective or a noun" is not correct. There are many places where forms of "to be" might be followed by a bare infinitive or a full infinitive.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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