Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!
**This is a translated passage. It is neither intended to express a political opinion nor start a political discussion. I'm just interested in the language. **
The Western democratic pattern is based on the rule that everyone – individuals and groups – accepts in advance not to take violent measures and settle disputes and conflicts in legitimate and nonviolent ways. The player is the individual who goes to the ballot-box and votes out of his free will and not under pressure put on him by his family. Yet eliminating the tribal structure and canceling its role within a short period is an impossible mission. Therefore, young democracies should enable traditional structures whether they are ethnic, tribal, religious or sectarian, to be represented within the young democratic system. That, of course, will force the democracy to struggle for its legitimacy and survivability against veteran and traditional structures which are strong and legitimate and sometimes even violent.