I have trouble understanding the following in red.
"To pull this off under these impossible constraints, we had to do everything differently,..... Even the NASA administrator, Daniel Golden, nearly flipped out when he received his initial mission briefing---he couldn't get past how many new things we were trying out."
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.
Great explanation and visual!
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.