Hello! I'm an author who has been working on brushing up my grammar by practicing line-edits on my own manuscript. However, there are some spots I'm not quite sure about...
1. (Comma placement) She kept her gaze at her feet, not wanting to look at the approaching dais before her (comma?) or at the great black throne that crowned the room.
I know you're only supposed to use a comma if there are two independent clauses (or so I think). I wasn't sure if "black throne" and "crowned" were the subject and verb, or if "she" at the very beginning is still the main subject.
2. (Lie vs. lay)
Her blood chilled at the memory of what lay beyond those doors...
The pieces of the mirror’s shattered surface lay on the filthy floor below...
Did I get it right? If I didn't, could you please explain why so I'll know better next time? Lie vs. lay is terribly confusing to me.
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