What do You think of my grammar? THANK YOU!

[wishsuccess4u]

" You'll see the quality of your future voiceover from the very beginning, before we start the work,
so you can make your best decision and never waste your money!
We'll gift you with a free 60-second voiceover every time you request a free quote - not just once!
Because we want you to be happy with our service! "




THANK YOU for Your time!
Love to all of You! :lol:

 

[wishsuccess4u]

Thank YOU, Gillnetter! :-D

It was very helpful!

I wish You a great success!

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Here's my new version:​

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and only $27/m for voiceovers up to 15 minutes
# 4 Claim our voiceover gift & hear quality for yourself!



I'd love to hear Your opinions!

Thank You!
Love to all of You! :-D

 

[Academic Writing]

Hi wishsuccess4u. This appears to be cross-posted at https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/...-check-my-sentences-thank-you.html#post917268

I offered some thoughts for you there. Good luck!