Re: question about the use of when
If you are looking for help with time sequences, I can helpl you think of some more likely examples.
Tom is playing golf when he remembers it's his wedding anniverary.
Tom was playing golf when he remembered it's his wedding anniversary.
Every time Tom cuts onions, he cries.
Tom was cutting onions when he started to cry.
But if you're just playing a game with us to see if you can slip in offensive words in unlikely scenarios to see if we'll respond, you won this round, but it will be your last.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.