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    "The rebels killed people indiscriminately, including women and children."
    "The rebels killed indiscriminately, including women and children."

    Is the second sentence acceptable? Is including in the second sentence dangling, since the larger group in which women and children were included is not stated explicitly?

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    Re: Including

    They are both acceptable.

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    Re: Including

    But, in:

    "The rebels killed indiscriminately, including women and children."

    the verb killed is intransitive.

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    Re: Including

    Kill can be used both transitively and intransitively. Check it out here.

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    Re: Including

    There is ambiguity in the second that I don't see in the first. In the second one, it's possible to read it as even the women and children among the rebels kill people indiscriminately. Less likely, but possible.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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