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    ziawj2 is offline Member
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    Default shorten the sentences

    The sentences below have been shorten. Could you give me your suggestion? Thank you!
    1. The new wristwatch is in a green box in the top drawer of the bedside table.
    New wristwatch in green box in top drawer of bedside table.
    2. It is very hot here now.
    It's hot.
    3. We are having a wonderful party.
    Party wonderful
    4. Every single one of us here had reached the point of believing everything about him.
    Everybody had come to believe everything about him.
    5. Sharon is canceling her vacation because there is some urgent business problem for her to deal with.
    Sharon canceling vacation for urgent business problem.
    6. They helped us learn about a potential risk of abuse.
    They educated us about abuse potential.
    7. Mike is returning home, for he has just graduated from college.
    Mike returning home--just graduated from college.
    8. They emerged from the meeting walking side by side.
    They walked together after meeting.
    9. I wasn't able to do it as I had planned.
    I couldn't make it.
    10. What I am going to do is contact a media outlet that has a lot of money.
    I'm going to contact a rich media outlet.

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    Gillnetter is offline Key Member
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    Default Re: shorten the sentences

    Is the idea to end up with correct English sentences? I'm not sure what you are trying to do. "Party wonderful" doesn't mean "We are having a wonderful party".

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    Default Re: shorten the sentences

    NOT A TEACHER

    I am not really sure what you need to help with. Some of the shortened sentences are lacking their original sense. It really depends on how you want to shorten them. I wrote some notes, but they are definitely not exhaustive, or some of them might even be incorrect. I advise specifying the kind of shortening you imagine, because some of the sentences are without verbs, thus, appearing to me like headlines and some of them are lacking certain information from the unshortened sentences, which may cause confusion.

    The sentences below have been shortened. Could you give me your suggestion? Thank you!
    1. The new wristwatch is in a green box in the top drawer of the bedside table.
    New wristwatch in green box is in top drawer of bedside table.
    2. It is very hot here now.
    It's hot. Fine. Depends one the situation. In certain situations you might want to stress the place (here).
    3. We are having a wonderful party.
    The party is wonderful
    4. Every single one of us here had reached the point of believing everything about him.
    Everybody had come to believe everything about him. Fine
    5. Sharon is canceling her vacation because there is some urgent business problem for her to deal with.
    Sharon is canceling vacation for urgent business problem.
    6. They helped us learn about a potential risk of abuse.
    They educated us about abuse potential. they taught us perhaps, if you really want to shorten it
    7. Mike is returning home, for he has just graduated from college.
    Mike returning home--just graduated from college. Sounds more like a newspaper headline
    8. They emerged from the meeting walking side by side.
    They walked together after meeting.
    9. I wasn't able to do it as I had planned.
    I couldn't make it. nothing about planning, is it important?
    10. What I am going to do is contact a media outlet that has a lot of money.
    I'm going to contact a rich media outlet. Fine


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