Re: tone-tentative and polite
And in my opinion the rewrite is too pushe and assumes too much. I agree with Vic on sounding annoyed about the lack of contact. I'd use something close to his first two sentences but the ending of the original. I emphasized opinion because there isn't a right or wrong answer.
Last edited by Barb_D; 10-Sep-2012 at 13:21.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.