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    letter to friend

    Hi
    Could anyone please run thorugh the following letter and give any suggestion for improvement? Thank you so much for your time.
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    Dear Fiona
    Iím terribly sorry to hear about what happened to your dadís silver. Youíre right in saying it must have been an insiderís job as I think I know who the culprit is.
    In todayís Oxford Mail, thereís an advert for the sale of a silver teapot which, Iím absolutely sure, is your fatherís piece. You might be wondering how I can be so sure about that. The seller is no other than Michael Ė he even has the nerve to put down his own phone number on the advert. How pathetic! Fiona, even if he really loves you, he surely has a strange way of showing his affection. While I know I really shouldnít tell you how to live your life, I canít stand by idly and watch my best friend got conned by a lying thief. Leave it to me to get the pot back but, for goodness sake, dump him my dear. Donít even think about staying under the same roof with such a crook.
    When I get the teapot back Iíll keep it until you come here so donít you worry anymore. Just tell your dad that you found it back from a friend who is a practical joker or something along that line to keep him happy for now.
    Cheers
    Stan
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    Re: letter to friend

    insider's job- usually we say 'inside job'
    as I think I know who the culprit is- I'd put a coma before this
    dump him my dear- dump him, my dear
    When I get the teapot back I’ll keep it until you come here so don’t you worry anymore.- how about a comma or two?

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    Re: letter to friend

    Dear tdol

    Thank you so much for your comments.

    Cheers

    mkko

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    Re: letter to friend

    You're welcome.

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