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    Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    The patient's clinical manifestation has no indication for surgery , and the ultrasound doesn't show the possible existence of the tumour , so we decide to take conservative treatment.

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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    The patient's clinical manifestation has no indication for surgery , and the ultrasound doesn't show the possible existence of the tumour , so we decide to take conservative treatment.
    If there was no tumor, why did you use "the" tumor? The election as to the type of treatment was made in the past. What is the correct past tense for "decide"? One doesn't "take conservative treatment". Rewrite this part using "upon".

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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    And do not put a space before a comma.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by Gillnetter View Post
    If there was no tumor, why did you use "the" tumor? The election as to the type of treatment was made in the past. What is the correct past tense for "decide"? One doesn't "take conservative treatment". Rewrite this part using "upon".
    Thank you.

    First attempt of rewriting:

    The patient's clinical manifestation had no indication for surgery, and the ultrasound didn't show the possible existence of tumour, so we decided to take upon conservative treatment.

    Is there a need for further editing?

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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    Thank you.

    First attempt of rewriting:

    The patient's clinical manifestation had no indication for surgery, and the ultrasound didn't show the possible existence of tumour, so we decided to take upon conservative treatment.

    Is there a need for further editing?
    "evidence of a tumo(u)r"
    "We decided upon conservative treatment"

    As Gillnetter said, "take" is unnecessary.
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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    "evidence of a tumo(u)r"
    "We decided upon conservative treatment"

    As Gillnetter said, "take" is unnecessary.


    Does "We decided upon conservative treatment" mean "We decided upon conservative treatment (which would be recieved by the patient)"?

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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    Does "We decided upon conservative treatment" mean "We decided upon conservative treatment (which would be recieved by the patient)"?
    It would be rather odd for them to decide upon a treatment plan for anyone other than the patient!
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    Re: Is the sentence grammatically okay? If not, edit it please

    Tip for a better thread title: The patient's clinical manifestation.


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