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    Hi all,
    I was wondering if you could help me out with this.
    Do you think this sentence is grammatically correct? Is it clear to understand?

    "Do you want to have the same relationship you had with your parents with your children?

    Thank you

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    Default Re: Is it correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by shabani View Post
    Hi all,
    I was wondering if you could help me out with this.
    Do you think this sentence is grammatically correct? Is it clear to understand?

    "Do you want to have the same relationship you had with your parents with your children?

    Thank you
    It's too unclear. "Do you want to have the same relationship with your children that you had with your parents?"
    Or do you mean, "Do you want to have the same relationship with your children that your parents had with you?"

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    Default Re: Is it correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by shabani View Post
    Hi all,
    I was wondering if you could help me out with this.
    Do you think this sentence is grammatically correct? Is it clear to understand?

    "Do you want to have the same relationship you had with your parents with your children?

    Thank you
    The word order, especially at the end (... with your parents with your children) is a little odd. I would use:

    Do you want to have the same relationship with your children that you had with your parents?

    Also, Shabani, you are up to 103 posts now. I'm sure you must have noticed the number of times that people are asked to give their posts more helpful titles. "Is it correct?" tells us nothing about the content. A good title would have been "Do you want to have the same relationship ...?"
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Default Re: Is it correct?

    Thanks Raymott.
    I think the second one is clearer and conveys what I'm going to say.

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    Default Re: Is it correct?

    I'm sorry emr2d2. Yes, you're right. I hadn't noticed it though.

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