Results 1 to 4 of 4
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Student or Learner
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Australia
      • Current Location:
      • Australia

    • Join Date: May 2012
    • Posts: 470
    • Post Thanks / Like
    #1

    I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone

    "I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone."

    Original sentence



    What I have turned it into so far.

    "On a regular basis, I have made sales to many clients via the telephone"

    I don't like the "via the telephone" part.

    Can anybody recommend a better way to say this?
    I'm not a teacher yet, but I am studying a Bachelor of Education with an English Literature major at Charles Sturt University, in NSW, Australia.

  1. emsr2d2's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 24,998
    • Post Thanks / Like
    #2

    Re: I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone

    Quote Originally Posted by HanibalII View Post
    "I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone."

    Original sentence



    What I have turned it into so far.

    "On a regular basis, I have made sales to many clients via the telephone"

    I don't like the "via the telephone" part.

    Can anybody recommend a better way to say this?
    Note first that in the original sentence, you should have used "every day" not "everyday".

    When you changed it to "On a regular basis", you changed the meaning. The original sentence was quite clear that successful sales were made every day.

    "By telephone" is much better than "via the telephone".
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Student or Learner
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Australia
      • Current Location:
      • Australia

    • Join Date: May 2012
    • Posts: 470
    • Post Thanks / Like
    #3

    Re: I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Note first that in the original sentence, you should have used "every day" not "everyday".

    When you changed it to "On a regular basis", you changed the meaning. The original sentence was quite clear that successful sales were made every day.

    "By telephone" is much better than "via the telephone".
    Cheers.

    I didn't actually write it, my brother did so he's looking for a bit of help.
    I'm not a teacher yet, but I am studying a Bachelor of Education with an English Literature major at Charles Sturt University, in NSW, Australia.

    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Retired English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • England
      • Current Location:
      • England

    • Join Date: Jun 2010
    • Posts: 16,063
    • Post Thanks / Like
    #4

    Re: I have made sales to clients everyday via the telephone

    In the UK, we could say 'I make a lot of telesales every day'.


    Concise Oxford English Dictionary 2008 Oxford University Press:
    telesales
    plural noun chiefly Brit. the selling of goods or services over the telephone.


    Rover


Similar Threads

  1. sales by item/ sales by items
    By idiotmike in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 24-Sep-2010, 04:54
  2. Replies: 3
    Last Post: 25-Mar-2010, 15:06
  3. [Grammar] Bank Clients OR Banking Clients....???
    By SunMoon in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: 08-Oct-2008, 20:10
  4. sales record, sales report
    By marieuni in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 10
    Last Post: 20-Jul-2007, 20:16

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •