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    Default Is this sentence nativelike?

    Hi
    Would you help me make this sentence more nativelike?

    Language as a social phenomenon is always changing under the influence of different
    factors among the most important of which are gender, age and education as
    social variables.


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    Default Re: Is this sentence nativelike?

    Are "gender, age and education" "different factors" or are they "social variables"? It seems as if you are identifying them twice.

    Try writing it as two sentences.

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    Default Re: Is this sentence nativelike?

    Gender, age and education are social factors which affect language.


    Language as a social phenomenon is always changing under the influence of different
    factors. Gender, age and education as social variables are among the most important factors which affect language.


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    Default Re: Is this sentence nativelike?

    Quote Originally Posted by skystar30097 View Post
    Gender, age and education are social factors which affect language.


    Language as a social phenomenon is always changing under the influence of different
    factors. Gender, age and education as social variables are among the most important factors which affect language.

    That's better. I still don't know what purpose "as social variables" serves in the sentence. It would read just fine without it.

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    Default Re: Is this sentence nativelike?

    I want to focus that gender, age and education are social variables.
    I want to say social variables affect language.
    Social variables are among keywords in my research.

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