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Dear Sir/ Madam
First of all I would like to express my sincere gratitude for the invitation to the opening of the Longridge Arts Centre. It was a real pleasure to take part in that event.
I must admit I was quite impressed. The Arts Centre seems to be a success. I found the exhibition in the Art Gallery to be fascinating. The Arts Library is just splendid. I think the cafe has a lovely atmosphere and it serves delicious food as well.
However, as you know, our College made a deal with you that hasn’t been properly fulfilled by your side. As a secretary of Student Committee I feel obliged to point this out to you.
Firstly, we expected that our students would have access to a recording studio, but apparently there isn’t any in the centre. There are also music and rehearsal rooms for hire but not free of charge. I suppose students wouldn’t be glad if they had to pay for them. Above all, you promised us a 10% discount on all tickets, not the stated 5%. I would like to express my strong discontent with this fact.
Taking into consideration what has been mentioned above, I urge to arrange a meeting with you to discuss those issues.
Last edited by leszkoss; 05-Nov-2012 at 18:47.