[Essay] a big, towering tree

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Ashiuhto

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Would anyone be kind enough to check the following paragraph for me? Thanks!

The dandelion was blown to a city that has pollution troubles. It saw a little tree lamenting about her wretched lot, so he asked her “Why do you look so sad?” “I want to grow into a big, towering tree,” The little tree answered and began to sob out her sad story. “However, I think it impossible to realize my dream because I am grown in this polluted, barren land.” “Believe yourself. Never give up, and your dream will come true sooner or later.” The dandelion said. “Really? Can I do it?” the little tree stopped crying and surprisingly asked. “Yes, I have confidence in you.” The dandelion said. “Thank you. I will overcome.” the little tree said happily.
 

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The dandelion was blown to a city that has pollution troubles. It saw a little tree lamenting about her wretched lot, so he [You started the sentence with "It saw..", so you must carry on using "it". Or you could start the sentence with "He saw.."] asked her, “Why do you look so sad?” “I want to grow into a big, towering tree,” [STRIKE]T[/STRIKE]the little tree answered, and began to sob out her sad story. “However, I think it's going to be[or, "will be"] impossible to realize my dream because I am [STRIKE]grown[/STRIKE] growing in this polluted, barren land.” “Believe in yourself. Never give up, and your dream will come true sooner or later,” [STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] the dandelion said. “Really? Can I do it?” the little tree stopped crying and [STRIKE]surprisingly[/STRIKE] asked in surprise. “Yes. I have confidence in you,” [STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] the dandelion said. “Thank you. I will overcome,” the little tree said happily.

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