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    ladyTL is offline Junior Member
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    Another widely discussed topic that deals with fairness is whether animal research is right or wrong. Sometimes when seeing animal research in TV-shows, I become really mad. Who has decided that the life of animal is less precious than ours? Do we really have the rights to govern their life in order to find cures?
    If a dog has accidentally killed a man in self-defence, it has to be deceased. But when we use them as experimental animals, we might have to sacrifice at least 3 animals life before we have found the right cure, how can this be fair enough?
    In the view of scientists, they think it is correct. Because there is no other way to find out how the cures work if they donít be tested on living creatures, therefore animal is the only way. But how fair is it to animals?

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    Default Re: Help me to correct this paragraph please!

    Quote Originally Posted by ladyTL View Post
    Another A widely discussed topic that deals with fairness is whether animal research is right or wrong. Sometimes when seeing animal research in on TV shows, I become really mad angry. Who has decided that the life of an animal is less precious than ours? Do we really have the rights to govern their life in order to find cures? (You really can't start with "Another" because there is nothing before it)
    If a dog has accidentally killed a man in self-defence, it has to be deceased killed (or destroyed, or, put to sleep). But when we use them as experimental animals, we might have to sacrifice at least 3 three animals life before we have found the right cure, how can this be fair enough?
    In the view of Scientists, they think it is correct because there is no other way to find out how the if their (They may care how a cure works but they are more concerned with if they work first) cures work if they donít aren't be tested on living creatures, therefore animal testing is the only way. But how fair is it to animals?
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    Default Re: Help me to correct this paragraph please!

    Quote Originally Posted by Gillnetter View Post
    Gil
    THANKS FOR HELPING ME :D but I have got some questions:
    Why can't I use "in the view of"?
    Why should it be "aren't tested" instead of "don't be tested"?

    Thanks again!

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