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    In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
    You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.

    Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?

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    Default Re: character

    Quote Originally Posted by ziawj2 View Post
    In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
    You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.

    Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?
    The "he is qualified" part means that he has met the requirements to receive, or get, a good husband. Is that what you meant? If not, try this - "he is qualified as a good husband with his characteristics of responsibility, humility, integrity, etc.".





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    Default Re: character

    Quote Originally Posted by ziawj2 View Post
    In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
    You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.

    Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?
    But the exercise isn't to avoid wordiness. If it was, you could simply assume that the woman already knows Jack's character (one would hope, since she's chosen to marry him).

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