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    Hi can some kind soul pls help to write a appropriate and outstanding letter in applying a slot in kindergarten. My case is kinda special and I really hope expert in English n letter writing can help me plssss!!! Anticipating for some kind reply. Much appreciated and thanks in advanced.

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    Hello Jacobie,

    If you write a draft of your letter and post it here, someone may take a look to see how we can help you with it. When you write your draft, make sure you are using real words, like "please" and "in" not "pls" and "n."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    I am really not confident with my letter writing in getting my child to this famous school and would greatly appreciate helps from you please. Please do add in any positive or negative words if necessary to make this letter more impressive? Thank you very much!!

    Dear XXXX

    With duerespect, I XXXX, mother of XXXX would like to request of transferring my daughter’sto XXXX kindergarten.

    XXXX'sdate of birth is XXXX and is currently studying in level 2 in XXXX kindergarten.

    XXXX isfamous to have gotten high qualified and experienced teachers, good materialconditions and good reputation, XXXX Kindergarten cum Primary sectionand leading to Secondary section will definitely provide a good environment in whichshe can learn throughout her growing stage and to effectively equip her for thechallenges of her future. I trust if she has been given a chance to be partof XXXX, not only it would improve her social skills but also to learn how tolive for others and to put her love into Christ for action.

    XXXX isa fun-loving, active and expressive girl and is popular among teachers and kids inclass. She is very friendly and loves taking care of other children. She is anout-going girl who enjoys all activities inside and outside of kindergartensuch as piano, dancing cycling, writing and other activities. She can completeher homework independently. She was also chosen to be Girl Guide in school andthis shows that she can be a good leading example in school.

    Myhusband and I would do all in our power to support our daughter. Though I knowplaces in your school is very competitive and demanding, I still determine toapply for a place for XXXX as Winston Churchill saying “Life is a test and thisworld a place of trial”.

    Attachedto this letter is her report card for level 1 in kindergarten and would be gratefulif she could be granted an opportunity for an interview. Thank you forconsidering our application and we look forward to your positive reply.

    Yourssincerely,
    Last edited by Jacobie; 30-Nov-2012 at 16:54.

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    Default Re: application of transfering my child to a famous school

    What does the school you want her to go to ask you to submit? Are there points your application letter should cover? Do they want it to be a certain length? Discuss anything specifcally? I assume it is a Christan school?

    It's a bit confusing because you use XXXX as both the name of the school and your daughter's name.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Thank you so much Barb_D for your reply. My daughter is in K2 now at her age of 4 and when she turns 5 next yr she will be in K3. I wanted to apply K3 for her in that famous school but thethey said its already full and cant be put on waiting list. Instead that lady advised me to appeal for K2 which semester 1 has already ended, now its beginning of semester 2. She told me to write a letter explaining about my situation and attached my daughter's report card for K1. I like about this school is because they have primary and secondary school as well. and for existing students from kindergarten can promote straight to primary eventually secondary later. Its not easy i know to get in. good things are hard to get! still i wanted to try! Sorry to make you confuse, do you have a private inbox that i can commuicate with you?
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    Hi Barb_D. can you help please? Im a little running late in submitting the application. Please. Thanks alot!

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    hi Barb_D. i hope to get your help and reply soon please. i need to submit this asap.. sincerely asking for help. =)

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    Sorry, I didn't see your reply.

    You need to be a bit more clear from the beginning.

    My daughter, name, is currently in K2. I am respectfully requesting that she be admitted for the second semester in the K2 program at [name of school].

    [name] is [then describe her as you have done - say why she would be an asset to the school]

    I hope she will be admitted to [name of school] because [now say why it would benefit her.]

    [You might want to say what you would provide to the school as a family - would you be a class volunteer, serve on committees, etc. I don't know if this important where you are. Here, they would expect participation from the parents as well, I think.]

    As requested, I have attached her reportcard from her first semester. [As you can see, she got all A's. - Or something else complimentary about her performance.]
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Hi Barb_D, i have completed the letter with your advices. Please help to do a last check before i have confident in sending out? Thanks alot lot!!

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    Dear Name of Principle,

    My daughter, Sandra Lunt is currently inK2 of a Pre-School. I am respectfully requesting that shebe admitted for the second semester in K2 of XXXX Kindergarten.

    Sandra Lunt is fun-loving, expressive and a younggirl with lots of potential. Her friendly and outspoken character made herpopular among school teachers and kids in class. She enjoys all activitiesinside and outside of school including, reading of story books, piano lessons,dancing lessons, cycling activities, going on outings and many otheractivities. She was chosen by school to be a member of Girl Guide which shows thatshe has been a good role model in school.

    I hope she will be admitted to XXXXKindergarten because I have great respect for your school’s fine reputationwith high qualified experienced teachers and think highly of the school’s manyfacilities. XXXX Kindergarten cum Primary School to Secondary School woulddefinitely provide a good environment in which she can learn throughout hergrowing stage and to effectively equip her for the challenges of her future. Itrust if she has been given a chance to be part of XXXX family, not onlyit would improve her social skills but also to learn how to live for others andto put her love into Christ for action.

    Although I know places in your school are verycompetitive and demanding, I still determine to apply for a place by anychance. My husband and I would do all in our power such as class volunteer,serve on committees if necessary to support our daughter.

    As requested, I have attached her reportcard fromher K1. As you can see her teacher to her comment was excellent. Therefore, itwould be grateful if she could be granted an opportunity for aninterview.Thank you forconsidering our application and we lookforward to your positive reply.

    Yours Sincerely,
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    Hi Barb_D.. please help ? Thank you =)

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