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    Default Please help me to make it sound good

    I've written a short advertising text but cannot make it sound good. Please help!

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    In this section we offer only the best what the Czech Republic and its wizards with their hand can offer: traditional glass souvenirs, beer cosmetics, Czech garnet, and products made of Czech crystals. Here you will find the best Czech restaurants and beerhouses with traditional Czech menu, and houses where one can take a beer bath. You can find various handicrafts here as well. In this section you will find things that you can bring home and that will make you happy many years and evoke good memories about the hospitable Czech Republic.

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    Default Re: Please help me to make it sound good

    Quote Originally Posted by Anastasia-Rus View Post
    I've written a short advertising text but cannot make it sound good. Please help!

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    In this section we offer only the best that the Czech Republic and its craftsmen [or craftspeople ?] can offer: traditional glass souvenirs, beer cosmetics, Czech garnet, and products made of Czech crystals. Here you will find the best Czech restaurants and beerhouses with traditional Czech menus; even houses where you can take a bath in beer! From the wide range of handicrafts on display in this section, you will find lots of ideas for gifts and souvenirs to bring home that will inspire happy memories of the hospitable Czech Republic.

    Thank you!

    Hope that helps. I'm intrigued by the "houses where one can take a beer bath", and I hope that I have adapted it correctly. It sounds very inviting, although a bit of a waste of beer.....
    I'm not a teacher of English, but I have spoken it for (almost) all of my life....

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    Default Re: Please help me to make it sound good

    Thanks a lot! They say that these beer baths can help to come over many diseases. I don't know, never tried them by myselves :)

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    Default Re: Please help me to make it sound good

    Quote Originally Posted by Anastasia-Rus View Post
    Thanks a lot! They say that these beer baths can help to overcome many diseases. I don't know, never tried them myself :)
    I'll put that on my to-do list for next time I'm in Prague.
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