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xperience

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Dear X:

As a child I remember being fascinated for all life science subjects at school. Being my father a doctor and having direct contact with the medical word; my interest group so much, that I wanted to follow my father steps and become a doctor once I grew up.

For different reasons I end up studying IT and successfully graduating in 2005 with a Bachelor in Honors in Computer Systems and Business Applications. I remember back then, wanting to apply my IT skills to the medical field. However, due to the working situation in S, I didn’t have too much to choose from.

In 2008 I moved from S to Sd, joining 3 months later A in B.

My long standing interest in Bioinformatics revived few months ago when I was looking for my next professional challenge, and I realized how developed were this field here in Sd.

Not only I love the type of work that you do, in overall, making peoples’ lives better through education, protecting the environment and health improvement; furthermore I have heard a lot of positive things about your company.

My education in business IT combined with my hands-on experience in different organizations has made me a high caliber professional as a Business (System) Analyst, Solution Designer and Change Management Specialist.

I am a great team player, professional at all times, business minded, highly technical, and with exceptional communication and problem-solving skills.

I am seeking a position that will offer me a positive environment in which I can use my skills and education to contribute to the ongoing success of your company.

Please, allow me to get in contact with you within the next few days. In the interim, I can be contacted at the above contact information.

Thank you very much for your time and consideration.

Sincerely yours,

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billmcd

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Dear X:

I am seeking a position that will offer me a positive environment in which I can use my skills and education to contribute to the ongoing success of your company. Following is some background information on me personally, my interests and my education.

As a child I remember being fascinated for all life science subjects at school. [STRIKE]Being[/STRIKE] My father is a doctor and having some direct contact with the medical word, my interest [STRIKE]group[/STRIKE] developed so much, that I wanted to follow in my father's footsteps and become a doctor once I grew up.

For different reasons I ended up studying IT and successfully graduating in 2005 with a Bachelor in Honors in Computer Systems and Business Applications. I remember, back then, wanting to apply my IT skills to the medical field. However, due to the working situation in S, I didn’t have too much to choose from.

In 2008 I moved from S to Sd, joining 3 months later A in B. (???)

My long standing interest in Bioinformatics was revived a few months ago when I was looking for my next professional challenge, and I realized how well developed [STRIKE]were[/STRIKE] was this field here in Sd.

Not only I love the type of work that you do, in overall, making peoples’ lives better through education, protecting the environment and health improvement; furthermore I have heard a lot of positive things about your company.

My education in business IT combined with my hands-on experience in different organizations has made me, I believe, a high caliber professional as a Business (System) Analyst, Solution Designer and Change Management Specialist.

I[STRIKE] am [/STRIKE] consider myself to be a great team player, professional at all times, business minded, highly technical, and with exceptional communication and problem-solving skills.

[STRIKE]I am seeking a position that will offer me a positive environment in which I can use my skills and education to contribute to the ongoing success of your company.
[/STRIKE]
[STRIKE]Please, allow me[/STRIKE] Unless I hear from you otherwise, I would like to get in contact with you within the next few days. In the interim, if you want to contact me, I can be contacted at the above contact information.

Thank you very much for your time and consideration.

Sincerely yours,

Encl: One-Page Resume

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