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    Transcend from one chamber to the next

    I have a Slavonic riddle about star signs and sun which moves from one star sing to another one during the epochs. I tried to translate it into English. It was a tough task! The riddle is acrchaic. I've got this:

    Sixteen Great Chambers not of wood and not of glass
    Give home to prince whose being never ends.
    Let more than thousand years pass
    The mighty prince transcends
    From one Great Chamber to the next
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    The rhyme is not perfect, of course, but I don't care abou that. What troubles me is words compatibility! As usual! I don't know whether it is possible to say "transcend from something to something else". If not, give me, please, any possible synonyms.

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    Re: Transcend from one chamber to the next

    No, it's not.

    But before that, the prince needs an article. And I'm not sure what 'whose being never ends' means.



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    The Sun moves or progresses. Maybe you could jiggle things around a bit, and say 'his path crosses/passes through.... [the different chambers].
    Last edited by BobK; 09-Dec-2012 at 16:07. Reason: PS added

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    Re: Transcend from one chamber to the next

    Quote Originally Posted by BobK View Post
    No, it's not.

    And I'm not sure what 'whose being never ends' means.
    It means that he is immortal:) Does it sound stupid?

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    Re: Transcend from one chamber to the next

    In my book, a being doesn't have an extent of time. A life does, and possibly you have a list of synonyms that gives 'being' as a synonym of 'life' (which it can be, in some contexts). But the question doesn't arise anyway, as the 'ends'/'transcends' rhyme is no longer needed (as 'transcends'doesn't mean what you want it to mean).

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    Re: Transcend from one chamber to the next

    Perhaps "whose existence never ends" then.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Re: Transcend from one chamber to the next

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Perhaps "whose existence never ends" then.
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