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    Default was or is please help

    When we were just few meters above the earth, we had always desired to reach the sky that was / is miles away, whose vastness had always kept our tiny mind filled with cheerful puzzles.

    When we were just few meters above the earth...(this sentence speaks about the childhood)
    Please let me know if it will be
    the sky that was miles away or the sky that is miles away
    ....which tense fits as per the context here.

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    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    When we were just a few meters above the earth, we [had] always desired to reach the sky that was / is miles away, whose vastness had always kept our tiny minds filled with cheerful puzzles.

    When we were just few meters above the earth...(this sentence speaks about the childhood)
    Please let me know if it will be
    the sky that was miles away or the sky that is miles away
    ....which tense fits as per the context here.
    Even though the sky is where it is all the time, I feel that "was" fits your sentence better. The problem I have is using "whose" when referring to the sky. "Whose" refers to people. I would say "... always desired to reach the sky that was miles away, the vastness of which ..."
    I'm really not sure how the vastness of the sky fills your mind with "cheerful puzzles". Why cheerful? What was the puzzle?
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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    Default Re: was or is please help

    I dont understand what you were doing a few metres above the earth. Were you able to levitate?

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    Default Re: was or is please help

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Even though the sky is where it is all the time, I feel that "was" fits your sentence better. The problem I have is using "whose" when referring to the sky. "Whose" refers to people. I would say "... always desired to reach the sky that was miles away, the vastness of which ..."
    I'm really not sure how the vastness of the sky fills your mind with "cheerful puzzles". Why cheerful? What was the puzzle?
    Thanks for your comments. this is a part of creative writing against a visual, the visual is of a small child pointing towards sky and his father sitting next to him just watching him in amusement.

    the vastness of which filled our tiny minds....I just intend to say that we were small, lots of cheerful thoughts, ideas filled our tiny minds....I hope this sentence makes a sense. Waiting for your honest feedback

    Thanks

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    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Thanks for your comments. This is a part of creative writing against a visual, the visual is of a small child pointing towards sky and his father sitting next to him just watching him in amusement.

    The vastness of which filled our tiny minds. I just intend to say that we were small, lots of cheerful thoughts, ideas filled our tiny minds. I hope this sentence makes a sense. Waiting for your honest feedback.

    Thanks.
    If the child and his father are sitting on the ground pointing up at the sky, then I don't understand why it starts "When we were just a few metres above the earth ..." At what point were the child and father a few metres above the earth?
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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