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    Need help with the following paragraph...

    I am trying to write the following mail, but I am not sure how to express myself correctly.

    I have requested your help with inquiring about/to inquire about the status of my application. How did you correspond with the school? and how did they repond to your inquiry? I am wondering you have a soft or hard copy of the informations regarding my applcation that you have provided me over the phone. My school teacher will like to take a look at it if you have a hard or soft copy.



    Hope somebody can assist me.

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    Re: Need help with the following paragraph...

    Quote Originally Posted by Jit833 View Post
    I am trying to write the following mail, but I am not sure how to express myself correctly.

    I have requested your help with inquiring about/to inquire about the status of my application. How did you correspond with the school? and how did they repond to your inquiry? I am wondering you have a soft or hard copy of the informations regarding my applcation that you have provided me over the phone. My school teacher will like to take a look at it if you have a hard or soft copy.



    Hope somebody can assist me.
    I am writing to enquire about the status of my application. Please advise me how you corresponded with my school [add name of school] and how they responded.
    You gave me some information about my application by telephone but I would be grateful if you could provide me with that information in writing. My teacher would like to look at it.
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