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    Exclamation Correct please!

    Ladies and Gentlemen,

    Our shop have been working successfully for three years on the German market for the car-accessory sales. Currently we’re planning to expand our business field and began the elaboration of our online shop for the tires and rims sales. We would be pleased to sell your products world-wide too.

    Unfortunately, the providers working with us currently are unable to provide us with the necessary technical description and the high quality digital pictures of the output produced by your company.

    We are sure that such information will favor the presentation of your company in the our e-shop, will give an additional publicity of the competitive advantages provided and, as the most important thing, it will assist the increase of sales for your products.

    Hence, we ask you to provide us with the general information about your company in the digital form, complete description of your company's products, the technical specifications, product test results obtained at your company's test facility for all types of manufactured tires (rims) and the High quality digital pictures.

    The copy of our trading licence will be sent immediately upon your request.

    Thank you in advance for your comprehension and assistance.

    Sincerely yours,

    Mustermann
    Commercial Manager

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    Thank you very much in advance.

    Kind regards, Wassermann

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    Our shop have been- has
    the German market for the car-accessory sales- the German car-accessory sales market
    began the elaboration- unclear- do you have the site or are you setting it up?
    tires and rims sales- tire and rim sales
    the necessary technical description and the high quality digital pictures of the output produced by your company- the necessary tecnical descrtiptions and high-quality digital pictures of your company's products
    will give an additional publicity- delete 'an'
    as the most important thing- most importantly/most importantly of all
    it will assist the increase of sales- will increase the sales of your products
    in the digital form,- in digital form/format
    High- high
    your comprehension- cooperation??

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    Hallo, tdol!

    Thank you very much for the help.

    Kind regards,
    Wassermann

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    You're welcome, Wassermann.

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