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    Could I get some feedback on my thesis?

    Professional athletes make a positive impact, and leave a lasting impression on children in the fight against children in the fight against childhood obesity.

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    Re: thesis

    Quote Originally Posted by kenny321 View Post
    Could I get some feedback on my thesis?

    Professional athletes make a positive impact, and leave a lasting impression on children in the fight against children in the fight against childhood obesity.
    That's your thesis?! It's a bit short. There's also something very wrong with the section I've marked in red.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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